• themeatbridge@lemmy.world
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    10 months ago

    There are too many commas and the phrasing is awkward. The first and last two commas are grammatically incorrect.

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      10 months ago

      Removing those commas only makes it the more awkward. Don’t apply for editing jobs.

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        10 months ago

        Grammar isn’t a matter of opinion, and incorrect grammar doesn’t make anything less awkward. We’re not talking about Oxford commas, these are just wrong.